Typical Hinsdale Mom
She has a mini van to drive her three children around
Typical soccer mom who brings oranges for half time
Stay at home mom who has too much time on her hand
Her husband is a successful doctor who supports the whole
family
He is usually only home at dinnertime
Family dinners and the big wooden table in the kitchen
They are a close knit family and talk about their days
They are a cookie cutter family where everything has to seem
perfect
In the summer her spare time is spent at the country club
Kids are in tennis and swim lessons
Husband plays golf with co-workers
She plays tennis with friends
She wears sweaters and workout clothes
School year comes around and It is time to send kids to
school
Her kids are well behaved
They attended a very good private school five minutes away
from home
Saint Isaac Jogues is the name
The children are forced to wear red white and blue uniforms
that they despise
Small grades about 90 children per grade and church on
Fridays
While her kids are in school she has her work out schedule
and luncheons
Lifetime Fitness is where all of Hinsdale attends
She is very in shape and healthy
Her luncheons consist of three other moms eating at corner
bakery
Eating their salads
They can gossip for hours about how awesome their children are
Friday night comes around
She supports the red devils
The local bar is full with all her friends around the block
from the football field
Friday night football is a time where the whole town can get
together
Town roars in victory as Hinsdale usually make it to state
every year
The stands are full with white black and red
As the weekend rolls around she is relaxed and happy
Reading a large book on the porch when she has time
And the cycle continues same schedule day in and day out
I grew up in a suburb of chicago . This is trying to relay the message that my hometown is a bubble and inside the bubble everything is trying to be perfect. My town is very materialistic. Thats why I came all the way to Kentucky to get away from it all (:
Reily,
ReplyDeleteYou've provided a lot of details about your chosen character. I like how you take us through a typical day for such a person in addition to providing descriptions. Doing so provided us with a lot of details, as well as provided a sense that this could be a person with a routine unique to her location. You do a good job of providing an objective tone than leans towards criticism, which keeps your personification from seeming too biased as you critiqued. Indeed, that style is similar to what Packer often uses in THE UNWINDING---the objective journalist who still communicates a perspective. Good work!
This personification of your hometown appears to be very well thought out. You have included such a wide variety of details about your place so that it is just enough to keep the reader's attention, but not too much so as to overwhelm the reader. The balance you have achieved is great and remains throughout the post, with line breaks to keep the eye moving along through the details. Good work, it was a great read!
ReplyDeleteI love the progression of this poem how the details go from broad to narrow. This is something that I believe would fit right into the unwinding. I really enjoy your footnotes as well it brings more insight to the poem and brings to light the issues. The bit about the football game is something that I can relate to from my home town and really hit home. Over all the flow and structure go very well together.
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