hard leather box, crimson and gold
polished silver tray draped with linen
Cartier, a diamond gleaming, staring, demanding attention
the sun, now setting, warmed my silk dress
peaceful moments, deep breaths, a vacation from life
grapevines left dancing shadows over the hills
the spice of the wine filled my head
tears came without warning
stomach dropping
overwhelming wave of anxiety
paralyzed at the thought of an answer
warm cobblestone under my polished toes
encapsulated by the straps of my heels
the isolation from the others
not a coincidence
watchful eyes hanging on for my next words
crowds, strangers invested in the pursuit of a happy ending
dinner and a show
who had this girl become
labels, carrots and foreign cars - a race
gala, balls, fundraisers
polished to be a centerpiece, admired, untouched
complacent, an accessory
envied only by outsiders
the news paper headlines, court rooms, money fraud
screams, greed, interviews
politically correct, channel Jackie O
voice striped, opinion mocked, belittled
suffocated by the expectations
"how dare you speak to the staff"
the words couldn't come
knots in my throat
mind swimming
saying no, no to the man who hears only "yes"
no to a life of coasting
no to silence
no to duchess
no to the little girl dreams
filled with my grandmothers heart
my stand was taken
finally free.
This is a brilliant blog post, it was very entertaining to read for a variety of reasons. The lengths of the lines keep it easy to read as they are all relatively short and therefore keep a good rhythm for the piece. Perhaps my favorite aspect of this post was the attention to detail told in the story. It helps you to picture the girl, right down to her accessories. I really enjoyed this as it kept the post intriguing, I was always wanting to read more about her because even though I was given details all about her there was an air of mystery about her all throughout the piece that leaves me with a sense of wonder and intrigue.
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ReplyDeleteI like the use of movement in this camera eye and your images. The shorter lines move us through your impressions very quickly, which can be disorienting at times, but this seems to fit the impression that you wanted to convey. The short lines in the last two stanzas are particularly striking because they feel very decisive and firm, as if the camera eye has come to some sort of conclusion. Finally, I like you use of images/observations here. Visuals such as the cobblestones under polished toes and the diamond are very specific. You've taken us on a whirlwind of a journey.